When your heroine is infiltrating a household and she's supposed to be an illiterate city girl with a consumptive mother, she should probably not 1) use her real name, 2) actually admit she's a playwright's daughter, 3) be escorted back to the hero's home by the newspaper editor and his bodyguard (both of whom the hero has already met), 4) have an editor who requires her to break her cover and come in for meetings inconvenient to the household's schedule, and 5) READ to the aforementioned staff for their entertainment. Look, when there are exactly four people in your hero's household: the one who's sailed with the hero forever and has simply taken up residence, one footman who's briefly mentioned, a nympho maid who's tupping the briefly mentioned footman, and the lush of a housekeeper who's been there all 20 drunken years-but he doesn't suspect the NEW MAID, who, by the way, is the only one who can be hired because nobody wants to work for him, of being the one to be behind his sudden popularity in the gossip columns, you have an insurmountable plot hole. * lack of observational and deduction skills * lovely descriptions of hero (that NEVER happens for me)
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